Guess what? It is time for the first writing assignment in the 4th Platform Building Challenge . The challenge is to write a Flash Fiction story starting with the words Shadows crept across the wall. Extra challenges include writing exactly 200 words, using the word orange, writing in your normal genre and ending with the words everything faded.
Here is my effort. If you like the story, go to the following link and vote for my story. I’m #78 on the list. If not, please stop by Rach’s site and check out the other talented writers.
Shadows crept across the wall. Outside the ocean ebbed and waved as the sunset bathed the crested tops. Fuchsia, reds, and varying shades of orange danced on the aquamarine surface.
Her sun-kissed skin cooled as the glowing orb made its final decent below the horizon. She’d waited on the sand until the chill forced her back into the beach house. The bag containing her towel and their picnic lunch still sat on the floor.
Pissed didn’t begin to describe how she felt. He’d stood her up again. The fourth reschedule of their second date. The strawberries now sat in a pool of melted whipped cream. She’d fantasized about using the fruit as something other than dessert.
Normally, she didn’t drink. Or get stood up four times in a row. She thought he was the one. Even though he kept missing their second date, she still felt he was the one. Mixing the liquids together, she sat down gently swirling the contents as she watched the stars blink into view.
She set the drink on the floor and walked to the window. Obviously, after a cancelled fourth date he definitely was not the one. As the light dimmed, everything faded.
Thanks for stopping by the blog and enjoy the other stories!
Melanie
Time to find someone new! You have my vote
Thanks Rebecca! Glad you stopped by.
Nice.
You had some nice descriptive language of the sunset scene. Bittersweet feel to this one. Glad she realised he wasn’t the one!
Yes, I’d say he definitely is NOT the one. Beautiful imagery, nice inner thoughts.
She deserves someone better! Nice job! I’m # 61.
I loved reading her inner thoughts and the descriptions of her surroundings. She definitely should throw those strawberries in his face!
I’m #123.
Now that’s a though Carrie! Thanks for stopping by. Will check out your entry.
Nice. I liked the transition of the lovely language into her being pissed. lol
Thanks Donna! You’ve been a busy bee lately. Feel like I never talk to you anymore!
Obviously! nicely done. Mine is #71
Thanks Bridget.
Definitely not the one! She can find someone way better
Man, I’d have given up on the first rescheduled date! Great job! I feel sorry for her, but she’ll find the one! lol.
Thanks Ashley. I know too many people that give more than four chances! lol Thanks for stopping by.
Well, expectations with someone like that…
I’m #58, Tale Spinning
I like how you shift gears after the first paragraph. I expected it to go a certain way and then I got a nice surprise.
Glad you liked it! I had him showing up, then decided it was better without him. Thanks for stopping by.
Aww, so sad. Love the way you told it!
Thanks Deniz! Love your blog by the way.
Thanks so much!
Time to move on to the next one girlfriend
Good take on the challenge. I just submitted mine #116 Good luck!
Exactly Synithia! Thanks for stopping by. Will check yours out.
Oh, poor girl! She should’ve given him the cold shoulder after the fist missed date. Make him come begging. She’s better off and deserves much better!
Good job! I’m entry #96. Stop on by sometime!
Thanks Nancy. Will do. I’ll go check yours out.
Guess this would be a typo?”until the chill forced her into back into the beach house” Some great descriptions set the mood well.
You would be correct! Word didn’t even catch it. Thanks for pointing it out. Will correct that. Thanks for stopping by my blog siv.
Awww that’s so sad! I really liked it! Nicely written!
I’m #37
Thanks Alyssa! Will stop by and check yours out.
Nice introspect from your character – I feel for her but can tell she’s strong. Nice work!
Thanks Ann. Glad you stopped by the blog.
Oh, this one is sad. I feel bad for her. Well written.
Thanks Jamie. Glad you came by to read it.
Aww poor girl! I hope she finds a better guy. Love your take on the challenge
I’m entry #19
Thanks Jessica! Will go by and check yours out.